Help me with the end of this story plz!? Question: I dont know how to end/go on with this short story of mine.. Its due today.. Please take the time to read it, I really would appreciate the help &I'll give 10points!
Here it is:
"What a wonderful day...", Hayley sarcastically said to herself. She didn't get half of her paperwork done and now she was trying to get a cab in the pouring rain. As she was trying to hail a cab, a kind young man offered her his taxi. "Thank you so much!", she exclaimed. But, she didn't think he herd her over the sound of the rain thrashing the roof of the taxi. After struggling with her umbrella, Hayley plopped down into the back seat of the taxi and turned to the driver, “1028 Boxelder Street please.” Hold on, I still need to go to the grocery store. She pulled her planner out and scanned her grocery list hoping that it could all wait until tomorrow. Most of it could, she needed coffee creamer for the next morning though... I've changed my mind. Walgreen's on C.Y. Avenue.” “You got it” answered the driver. Hayley sighed. She couldn't wait to get home, well, to what was left of home. Ever since her brother died in a car crash two years ago, home just wasn't the same. It was just Casper, Wyoming now, not a home. Tears welled up just thinking about her brother again and she let her head drop in recollection of all the pain the memories brought back. Wait, something caught her eye. What was that under the seat? She wiped her tears away as she picked it up. It was an sealed envelope. “Here we are” the driver blurted out. Hayley stared down at the envelope and decided to take it with her. After paying the driver, she ran into the store.
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It was only sprinkling by the time she left the store. The wonderful aroma of the recent rain filled the night sky. Hayley thought to herself, It's only about half a mile back home; it wouldn't hurt to walk. She grinned as she began the walk home. She took a left on 15th and a right onto Boxelder, but she couldn't stop thinking about the envelope. Hayley pulled it out and looked at it again. There was no return or sending address on it. No stamp either. She was beginning to doubt if it was right for her to take it or not. But it didn't matter now, she had already taken it. She put it back in her purse, she decided to open later. Hayley finally arrived at her house just as it was getting dark. She made a simple PB&J and went straight to bed. It had been a long day.
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Hayley jumped out of bed at the dreadful sound of her alarm clock going off. After starting the coffee maker, Hayley got ready for work. She looked at the clock only to find out that it was already 7:46. She was going to be late for work again. She rushed out the door, ran up to Collins Street and called for a taxi. “2nd and Center please!” The taxi driver drove down Collins, but he missed his turn onto Poplar Street and he didn't take a left onto Center. Instead he turned right onto Wolcott and accelerated. This isn't right. Hayley spoke up, “I said 2nd and Center Street please.” The driver responded half harsh, half jesting, “Bad day to catch a cab. Now shut up.” Hayley was getting tense. She tried the door. It was locked. With horrid scenarios running through her head, Hayley began to observe her surroundings. They were driving past the Community College and it looked like he was headed towards the mountains. “Hey! Stop the car!” Hayley screamed. As the road narrowed, the driver accelerated again. They were quickly leaving population. Hayley tried to calm herself. She knew she had less than five minutes before they were at the base of the mountain. She frantically dumped her purse out on the seat next to her and searched for something, anything that could help her. In her rush to get to work, she had left her phone on the kitchen counter. Figures, the one time I need it the most. “What do want from me!?” Hayley's voice was more high-pitched than she wanted it to be. The driver carefully chose his words, he didn't want to reveal more information to her than necessary, “You have something of mine.” “Take anything! Just let me go when you have it.” “It's not that simple anymore,” mumbled the driver as they pulled into the driveway of a small abandoned log cabin. There was a young man standing in the driveway who was looking rather irritated. Hayley recognized him. He was the man that gave her his taxi the other night. By this time the driver had turned off the car and was engaging in conversation with the young man. Hayley could make out some of the conversation... “George! Why in the world did it take you so long!?” the young man could barely contain his anger. “Calm down, John. I couldn't pick her up until she left for work now could I?” “Well, does she have it with her?” “I haven't checked yet, but I don't think she's read it yet.” “And how could you possibly know that?” John couldn't help but be sarcastic. The sarcasm irr
(continuing the story) The sarcasm irritated George, but he continued anyway, “Because she doesn't know who I am or why we kidnapped her.”
Any suggestions on what I should fix or do next in the story?? I really would appreciate the help! I'm just completely stumped. :/
Answer:
Hayley finally arrived at her house just as it was getting dark. She made a simple PB&J sandwitch, as she wiped her forehead. It certainly had been a long day.
Clambering up the stairs, she practically collapsed on her bed due to fatigue. She needed a new life, this one was tiring her body out.
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Hayley jumped out of bed at the dreadful sound of her alarm clock going off. After starting the coffee maker, Hayley got ready for work. She looked at the clock only to find out that it was already 7:46. She was going to be late for work again.
She rushed out the door, ran up to Collins Street and called for a taxi. “2nd and Center please!” She shouted. The taxi driver drove down Collins, but he missed his turn onto Poplar Street and he didn't take a left onto Center. Instead he turned right onto Wolcott and accelerated.
"This isn't right," Hayley spoke up, “I said 2nd and Center Street please.” The driver responded half harsh, half jesting, “Bad day to catch a cab. Now shut up.” Hayley was getting tense. She tried the door. It was locked. With horrid scenarios running through her head, Hayley began to observe her surroundings. They were driving past the Community College and it looked like he was headed towards the mountains. “Hey! Stop the car!” Hayley screamed.
As the road narrowed, the driver accelerated again. They were quickly leaving population. Hayley tried to calm herself. She knew she had less than five minutes before they were at the base of the mountain. She frantically dumped her purse out on the seat next to her and searched for something, anything that could help her. In her rush to get to work, she had left her phone on the kitchen counter. Figures, the one time I need it the most.
“What do want from me!?” Hayley's voice was more high-pitched than she wanted it to be. The driver carefully chose his words, he didn't want to reveal more information to her than necessary, “You have something of mine.” “Take anything! Just let me go when you have it.” “It's not that simple anymore,” mumbled the driver as they pulled into the driveway of a small abandoned log cabin. There was a young man standing in the driveway who was looking rather irritated. Hayley recognized him. He was the man that gave her his taxi the other night. By this time the driver had turned off the car and was engaging in conversation with the young man. Hayley could make out some of the conversation...
“George! Why in the world did it take you so long!?” The young man could barely contain his anger, he never really had much of a patient streak.
“Calm down, John. I couldn't pick her up until she left for work now could I?”
“Well, does she have it with her?” “I haven't checked yet, but I don't think she's read it yet.”
“And how could you possibly know that?” John couldn't help but be sarcastic. Haley felt herself tense- this couldn't end well. Why had she taken that stupid letter...? Why?
"Listen," she began, as the two men looked at her, "i-if you're talking about that letter, it's at my house. I-I didn't mean to-" She was shut up when the younger of the two hit her across the head.
"Shut the heck up, you whiny little girl."
It was silent.
"Now, we know where you live. So we have no need for you any longer." Getting out what looked to be a knife, Haley screamed bloody murder. The scene switched out to the outside, where all could be seen was the splatters of blood against the window, and a piercing scream that made birds scatter.
Just like rain, blood falls...
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