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My husband ordered us tickets to see Nine Inch Nails which is his favorite band. I agreed to go because it would allow us to get out of the house for a night, which we typically don’t do. I had my reservations about going and thought it wouldn’t be my type of event. Six hours before the concert begins my mother arrived to watch our son. We leave and begin our trek to Oklahoma City and stop at the Spaghetti Warehouse to get something to eat, the food was great, I had the garlic and mushroom pasta, my husband got the fifteen layer lasagna, we ordered and split desert, a tiramisu that was delicious. As we are walking to the Ford Center (where the concert is being held) a man on a bike, with some sort of carriage attached, offers us a ride, we accept and hop in to this odd contraption that I had never seen before, I asked him what it was and he replied a bikeshaw (like a rickshaw but since he was transporting is on a bike it was a bikeshaw) It felt extremely awkward to be chauffeured to our destination by a man on a bicycle. We arrive at our destination, the Ford Center, ready to get our tickets; the Ford Center seemed to have different plans for us. We were required to wait 2 hours in the sweltering heat because they had to search everyone. The two men ahead of us in line were from Stillwater they went to OSU, we basically were forced to eavesdrop on everyone in line, since we were stuck with them for two hours. The line finally started moving an hour after standing in one spot, we were grateful to move a couple of feet. As we were getting closer to being searched one of the men in line ahead of us ran to his car, apparently he had something on him that he didn’t want the searchers to find. I find being searched kind of degrading, but I wasn’t going to oppose it I wanted in side where there was air-conditioning. When we walked in we went and purchased a shirt, hat, and water I needed the water badly. We go into the main room where NIN are playing since we got floor seats( which aren’t seats ) we had to stand there for five hours which wasn’t bad once the band started playing. There is supposed to be no smoking but it seems everyone disregarded this and was smoking. The man who was next to us offered us a joint, we declined, he was even able to smuggle in a bottle of whiskey. The show was amazing they had the best light show I have ever seen. We were so thrilled with the show we have already ordered tickets to their next show in Oklahoma which is November 22, in Tulsa.
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Answer:
My husband ordered tickets for us to see Nine Inch Nails, his favorite band. I agreed to go because it would allow us to get out of the house for a night, which we typically don’t do, even though I had some reservations about going. I thought it wouldn't be my type of event.
My mother arrived to watch our son six hours before the concert began. We began our trek to Oklahoma City, stopping at the Spaghetti Warehouse to get something to eat. The food was great! I had the garlic and mushroom pasta and my husband got the fifteen layer lasagna. We also split a delicious tiramisu for dessert.
As we walked to the Ford Center, where the concert was being held, a man offered us a ride on a bike with some sort of carriage attached. We accepted and hopped into this odd contraption that I had never seen before. I asked him what it was, and he replied "a bikeshaw" - like a rickshaw, but since he was transporting us on a bike it was a bikeshaw. It felt extremely awkward to be chauffeured to our destination by a man on a bicycle.
We arrived at our destination, the Ford Center, ready to get our tickets. However, the Ford Center seemed to have different plans for us. We were required to wait two hours in the sweltering heat because they had to search everyone. The two men ahead of us in line were from Stillwater and went to OSU. We basically were forced to eavesdrop on everyone in line since we were stuck with them for two hours.
The line finally started moving an hour after standing in one spot. We were grateful to move a couple of feet. As we were getting closer to being searched, one of the men in line ahead of us ran to his car. Apparently he had something on him that he didn’t want the searchers to find. I find being searched kind of degrading, but I wasn’t going to oppose it. I wanted to get inside where there was air conditioning.
After we walked in we purchased a shirt, hat, and water. I needed the water badly. We went into the main room where NIN would be playing. Since we had floor seats (which aren’t seats), we had to stand there for five hours. It wasn’t bad once the band started playing.
Although it was supposed to be no smoking, it seems everyone disregarded this. The man next to us offered us a joint which we declined. He was even able to smuggle in a bottle of whiskey.
The show was amazing! They had the best light show I have ever seen. We were so thrilled with the show we have already ordered tickets to their next show in Oklahoma (November 22, in Tulsa.)
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