Is my story any good?
Question:
I just started writing, and wanted to know if it's any good. This is just the first few chapters, and it will get a lot more interesting later. 2 years later he will marry Jesse and have a little girl, one day one his way to work the police will stop him and he will be sent to prison. suddenly everything will come back to him the remorse and i havent thought of the rest yet but here is the first chapters.
Chapter 1
The screech of the car trying to hit its breaks made me shiver. A sense of guilt came over me but quickly vanished as I thought about the consequences. I had to get out of here, even if it meant leaving my family. Somewhere during my childhood I went wrong. I don’t blame my parents, it wasn’t there fault.They had given me everything, but that was never enough. I started stealing when I was 12. Now I am a 19 year old on Most Wanted. “Parker, Parker! Stop!”I heard Mrs. Evans screaming. I kept replaying that moment over and over again. I had killed her child. I had never meant for this to happen. The ambulance was on its way, I could hear its sirens. I remembered the moment vividly, I had stolen a Porsche Cayman. I was racing down the street when I heard the cop’s siren. I sped up, when suddenly the cops were right behind me. I didn’t even look and I ran through the red light. Everything slowed down, I heard the cops slam their brakes to help the child lying on the floor motionless. The expression on Mrs. Evans face brought tears to my eyes. There was no time for remorse now, I quickly wiped my eyes and thought about what I was going to do. I have stolen a car, and killed a child. The cops are after me, have my license and know my address. I’ve been in situations similar to this one but never this extreme. I decided that I was going to just keep driving and end up wherever this crazy world takes me.
Chapter 2
14 days later I found myself in Burlington, North Carolina. I haven’t turned on a TV or even opened a newspaper since the accident, I couldn’t stand to hear about the family’s suffering or if they are looking for me. Today I was going to look for an apartment, lucky for me my parent’s had just recently added money to my credit card. I was at an open house for Eastbrooke Apartments when an elderly woman approached me. “Excuse me but are you Parker Thomas?” She asked in concerned tone. “Um, no. Who is that?” I stuttered. “ Oh you look an awful lot like him. There is a thief who had recently ran over a 7 year old girl. The damn kid just took off.” There was anger in her eyes as she spoke. “ Oh.” I managed to say. “I got me 4 grandchildren, I don’t know how someone could run over a child and just take off.” She said. What the hell was I doing? I thought to myself. She was right, how could I do this? “I don’t know, but I got to go.” I said quickly. I got in my car and drove down to the local diner. I sat down and started to eat my burger when I saw her. She was beautiful, her brown hair bouncing around. Those eyes we a perfect shade of blue. She looked like an angel, what would she want with me, I was basically the devil. After of an hour of staring at her, she got up and was heading for the exit. I got up and approached her. “Hey, I’m Parker, and you are?” “Jesse” she said with a wide grin. “Do you think I could buy you a drink?” I said confidently. “We’re at a diner silly!” “Um… well how about some, um pie?” Damn, I was so awkward! “Only if it’s blueberry.” She said laughing. We walked up to the counter, “Two slices of blueberry pie please. “Sorry sweetpea but we’re all out. All we gots is cherry.” I look at Jesse nervously. “You’re lucky you’re cute because if you weren’t I would be out of here.” She said with a sparkle in her eyes.
She thought I was cute! “So, how old are you?” I asked trying to make conversation. “18, you? “19.” “Cool, well could I get your number, maybe we could go out sometime?” “Sure” she said as she handed me her number. “I’ll call you tomorrow, and we can schedule something.” She yelled as she was walking out the door. “Sounds good.” When I was with Jesse I forgot about everything. She was defiantly the one.
Answer:
Err... Your chapters are very short (sorry it bugs me).
Why don't you add them together to make it into just one?
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