Can you please read my bio about Jim Morrison and tell me what you think? [UNFINISHED!]?
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Jim Morrison was born on December 8th 1943 in Melbourne Florida to his parents, Clara and Steve Morrison. He grew up in a post World War 2 atmosphere, and his father was an admiral in the navy. His father was gone a lot, so for the 18 months that he was on duty, Clara and Jimmy lived with Steve’s parents, Paul and Caroline. In 1947, the family moved to New Mexico where in Los Alamos the hydrogen bomb was being developed. When Jim was 3, about to be 4, he got a sister named Anne. But if that was traumatic to Jimmy, something else happened in New Mexico that would stay with Jim for the rest of his life.
It happened in the early morning on a highway between Santa Fe and Albuquerque. In the car included himself, his mother and father, and his grandparents. One point into the journey his father pulled off to the side of the road. His father and grandfather got out of the car to help. Jimmy looked up to see a bloody head-on collision with another car, and what looked like some Pueblo or Hopi Indians. People that were dead and injured scattered the roads, and little Jimmy wanted to help. As he tried to get out of the car; his mother had to hold him back. All Jimmy could do it squirm and squiggle to try and look at the gory chaos outside of the car. As they pulled away he pressed his face to the glass, mesmerized at what happened. They stopped at a gas station a few miles ahead to call for help and fill up on gas. Jim was visibly disarrayed. He kept asking questions as well. Soon enough everyone in the car was getting so agitated that his father finally said “Jimmy, it didn’t really happen. It was just a bad dream.” Jimmy didn’t believe his father though. “It was the first time I discovered death. I’m just this little…like a child is a flower, man, whose head is just floating in the breeze. But the reaction I get now, thinking back, looking back, is that, possibly, the soul of one of those Indians, maybe several of them, just ran over and jumped into my brain… It’s not a ghost story, man. It’s something that really means something to me.” Soon after, Jimmy began to wet his bed. He would go to his mom when this happened but she would send him to his room to sleep in the wet sheets. “Shame city.” He was so ashamed he would try to hide it, but his mother always found out. Then he started to not want to sleep in his bedroom at all, he was too frightened. All of this bed wetting could have been associated with a childhood bout of rheumatic fever, which may have also weakened his heart.
Jim Morrison was introduced into sex and sexuality early on in his life. Jim Morrison’s lawyer, Max Fink interviewed Jim in 1969, while getting ready for their trail for a “lewd and obscene” concert in Dade County. Max asked Jim to debrief his sexual history. He asked why he had chosen to show his penis on stage, and Jim replied, saying he thought it was a “good way to page homage to my parents.” Max was blown away by his answer and asked what his parents had done to him. Jim brought up to bed wetting incident and let slip that he was molested when he was a young boy, by a man. When max asked who, Jim refused to tell Max, only to say it was someone very close to the family. Sad thing is is that when Jim told his mother, “she had gotten angry, called his a liar, and insisted such a thing could never happen.” Jim began to cry, saying he would never and could never forgive his mother for this.
The family moved to Los Altos in 1948. He soon started public school as a shy, chubby boy who hated riding the school bus in the morning. Paranoia of the Cold War was still around and schools regularly required to practice duck and cover routines. Sometimes, lining the halls which were darkened, and stay beyond the range of bursting glass, as A-bombs wrecked their world. As a child, watching TV on the tiny 7 inch screen had a big impact on Jimmy. This would later be shown in the amateur films he made in college. In 1949, his younger brother Andrew was born. The family moved back to Washington DC for a year, then moved back to California, in Claremont. Jim’s father, Steve was serving in Korea. Jim Morrison attended Longfellow Elementary where he started 6th grade as a chubby, dominant boy. Including getting the title for best kickballer and president of the student council. But soon Jim was getting into trouble. When he was in the Cub Scouts his was asked to leave because of lack of respect and unruliness. In 1955 the family moved back to New Mexico where Jimmy started to change significantly. He gave up on piano lessons, his time with family became less, and he soon became fascinated with pre-historic looking reptiles. He would read about them. He would hunt them down, looking for their homes. The reptiles in the desert became Jim Morrison’s personal family, his friends. And soon, he became their king. “I am the Lizard King! I can do anything!” Later on in 1955, Jim’s father was assigned to the USS Midway and moved the San Francisco. Jim started
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I'm not trying to be rude or mean so please keep this in mind. Anyway, is this a copy of Jim Morrison: Life, Death, Legend by Stephen Davis? Some parts seemed to be a direct copy (language and everything) of this book. Particularly the portion where he talked about his "molestation".
Just to sum up my thoughts, I don't really like the use of the name Jimmy; I remember that being something that really bothered me about the Stephen Davis book; I feel it attempts to create a friendly and knowledgeable attitude that just comes off as fake. Also, I feel that some of your facts need to be checked. It seemed sensationalistic at times, and even a little bit prying. I am really opposed to the biography speaking of this supposed molestation by someone because it seems to aim it directly at his father. Considering his father is passed away and unable to defend himself, I think this is just uncouth. Also, many people have looked into that and there has been nothing to come of the statements; it is difficult to verify if they have ever even been say. Also, I feel that the language can be worked on into sounding more polished and fluent.
This actually seems to be either an exact or maybe watered down version of the copy. Maybe if you want to improve it you can look into some other sources for a more varied and credible amount of stories. If you don't mind me asking, what exactly is this biography for?
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