B&A: What would you think of this story?
Question:
I thought it up as a "what if" story that went way awry...
Okay so the girl, whom I've pretty much named Nathalia Grace Rodgers, goes to a local community college, and lives with her parents. Her dad loves math. One day Nathalia learns to {integrate inverse hyperbolic trig functions} (or something like that, that's just something my dad has always thrown around in math type conversations...)
She doesn't get the chance to tell her dad (whom I've pretty much named Jack Ralph Rodgers...not so sure about Ralph though...I like the name, but it doesn't quite fit) because she's in the shower when he gets home late from work. While she is in the shower, a man breaks into their house. She doesn't know this, but when she goes up stairs there's a LOT of blood everywhere, and she assumes her mom and brother are dead. She freaks and runs back down stairs and hides in a room in her house.
Someone else is in the room. She thinks it's her dad. But why wouldn't she, it looks just like her dad. They go, Nathalia doesn't know where to, it's just like get in the car kind of thing. They end up in Wheatland Wyoming, but Nathalia was asleep when they got there, so she doesn't know where they are. They hang out in a small shack like house, log cabin type thing...
Nathalia soon finds out that it is not her dad. It is her dad's twin, of whom she's never known. She doesn't let on that she knows. One day he thinks she is still asleep and takes a call...she finds out his name is Jake. He leaves, she tries to find usefull things and escape. In the middle of this, Jake returns. He sneaks up on her, and beats her. The last thing Nathalia remembers before blacking out is him undoing his/her pants buttons.
Nathalia later wakes up in a hospital. She has no idea how much later. She remembers what happened, and assumes she was raped. She decides not to wait around in the hospital with all the hospital bullcrap and escapes.
She sees a sign that says Wheatland, and assumes it's the Wheatland near her small Iowa town. She goes there, and it's not. Nathalia decides to go to Colorado. She's got no reason to go home without her family. Her closest aunt (to wyoming) lives in Nevada. She likes Colorado. She goes there (walking. camping. epicness) Once she gets into Colorado, however, she decides that it's not the right thing to do. She begins to think about what has happened. Decides to go to North Platte, Nebraska where her Grandmother lives with her grandfather (Mara Louise Lindville and Samuel Mark Lindville). She wants to ask her grandmother about all this. But her grandmother is old, and kind of loosing it. Her grandpa isn't her biological grandpa, so he wouldn't know anything. Maybe she'll find out something.
Nathalia decides to go back home. Her grandparents give her money to get there. On the way into town, she finds her dad. She is surprized to see he's alive, but she's unsure if it's really him. Tests him by telling him about learning the math thing. He knows what she's talking about. He knows nothing about the mom and brother though. They go back to his appartment (temporary, police looking for evidence @ home, cleaning, etc).
They connect to the Wyoming cops, and learn Nathalia was not raped. The cops came in just as she blacked out, on a tip.
End quote:
"Maybe the cops will find them all. Maybe we can rebuild our lives."
So it stays open...
Possible sequel:
a few years later, everything is starting to be somewhat stable, when Nathalia and Jack are going canoeing by a small town north of their town. They find Nathalia's mom/brother/both but they have sever amnesia and have started new lives.
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What do you think of the idea?
Does the possible sequel idea sound too cheezy??
Thank you so much for reading all this~!
Answer:
I really wouldn't like it, but not because you're a bad author, but because I'm just not interested in these types of books.
However, the idea sounds pretty cool! If you like it, then by all means, write it. I bet tons of thriller fans will love it.
Good luck.
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