Grammar and mechanics help?
Question:
I need to correct these sentences for a class because the same ones will be used on a test next week. I know how to fix some of them, however, I am unsure of somethings so if you have any ides on how to correct some and then please let me know.
1.Thankfully, her dad turned the volume down immediately and her ear drums stopped ringing.
2.Billy’s dad made him a list every Sunday morning that was hung on the fridge called Billy’s Sunday to do list.
3.Pulling up to their driveway, the sun was shining into the windows of her second story room above the family room.
4.She lives in a two bedroom townhouse.
5.She has a college text book.
6.What hangs in their closet?
7.It depends on the readers values as to whether they like Natalie.
8.She takes a five minute timeout.
9.The street was filled with angry protesters shouting spectators and police.
10.The churches program is health conscious.
11.She needs Monday’s off for school.
12.The Dr. is a thirty five year old kid that pretty much refuses to get old.
13.This was Johns lucky day.
14.Johns motto in life is, “life is to short to have enemies, so be good to everybody”.
15.Before moving to Myrtle Beach, Johns parents’ were farmers in Kentucky, to being the southern Baptists that they are, they don’t approve of all Johns’ decision making.
16.He has 5 siblings: 2 girls and 3 boys.
17.I kick the door to the church in and found out that I am not the only survivor.
18.Feeney drive a one of a kind 1975 Ford Fairlane, that his father passed down to him.
19.He took her to the office, got her a new hat and told her she would be working with Nina.
20.As she touched the slimy chicken breasts, she started getting in her groove, her heart slowed down and started beating normally again.
21.“Please give the flowers too the girl to.” I asked.
22.Even though they have been quite successful in there own way throughout the journey of life Bob has a various number of jobs ranging from the lowest point being a vacuum cleaner salesman to being a supervisor for Dupont Corporation.
23.His mother asked “Then why are all of your friends with you if you were just gargling Listerine”? “You’re Lying”! She said.
24.The day was long and tedious and the work was physical.
25.Why is it so important that we learn the basic moves other writers, why can’t we just use our own thoughts?
26.Joe reads all kinds of mysteries, and nonfiction.
27.His parents are happily married after thirty years.
28.Joe reaches into the car and turns the radio on to 98.5 so he could listen to some jazz while he washed the car.
29.Being that he’s the oldest, he has many responsibilities.
30.After traveling through the boring uneventful state of Indiana a typical weekend at grandmas consists of home made cooking, going shopping at the Marion mall, and her gift giving ways
31.Arriving during dinner time we walked up the narrow stone paved path to enter through the large clear windowed door we could already smell the seasoned, prime rib cooking in the oven.
32.He listens to popular bands all over the world.
33. Being the oldest, the other siblings always looked up to him.
34. Although in his day, he was not the most like of military commanders; General Patton is still looked to this day as one of our nation’s greatest military leaders.
35.Anne's mom's potato salad tasted good.
36.I consider her a good role model, not only due to the fact that she is a good singer, but because of her low profile attitude and a good provider to her family.
Answer:
Whoa, that's a lot of stuff!
I don't know your rules. I wouldn't phrase some things the way they are. If you can't change the order, well, I'm stuck. Additions marked *
1. Thankfully, her dad turned the volume down immediately and her ear drums stopped ringing.
1. Thankfully, her dad turned the volume down immediately,* and her ear drums stopped ringing.
2. Billy’s dad made him a list every Sunday morning that was hung on the fridge called Billy’s Sunday to do list.
2. Billy’s dad made him a list every Sunday morning.* It was hung on the fridge,* and called *"Billy’s Sunday to do list"*.
3. Pulling up to their driveway, the sun was shining into the windows of her second story room above the family room.
3. As they pulled *up to their driveway, the sun was shining into the windows of her second story room,* above the family room.
4. She lives in a two bedroom townhouse. (OK in British English)
4. She lives in a two bedroomed* town-house. - perhaps
5. She has a college text book. OK
6. What hangs in their closet? OK
7. It depends on the readers values as to whether they like Natalie.
7. It depends on the readers'* values as to whether they like Natalie.
8. She takes a five minute timeout.
8. She takes a five minute time-*out. perhaps
9. The street was filled with angry protesters shouting spectators and police.
9. The street was filled with angry protesters,* shouting spectators,* and police.
10. The churches program is health conscious.
10. The churches'* program is health conscious.
11. She needs Monday’s off for school.
11. She needs Mondays* off for school.
12. The Dr. is a thirty five year old kid that pretty much refuses to get old.
12. The doctor* is a thirty five year old kid that,* pretty much,* refuses to get old.
13. This was Johns lucky day.
13. This was John'*s lucky day.
14. Johns motto in life is, “life is to short to have enemies, so be good to everybody”.
14. John'*s motto in life is* “life is too* short to have enemies,* so be good to everybody”.
15. Before moving to Myrtle Beach, Johns parents’ were farmers in Kentucky, to being the southern Baptists that they are, they don’t approve of all Johns’ decision making.
"to being the southern" should this read "SO being the southern"?
15. Before moving to Myrtle Beach, John'*s parents* were farmers in Kentucky;* so being the *Southern Baptists that they are, they don’t approve of all John'*s decision making.
16. He has 5 siblings: 2 girls,* and 3 boys.
17. I kick the door to the church in and found out that I am not the only survivor.
17. I kick* in the door to the church,* and find* out that I am not the only survivor.
18. Feeney drive a one of a kind 1975 Ford Fairlane, that his father passed down to him.
18. Feeney dro*ve a *"one of a kind"* 1975 Ford Fairlane, that his father passed down to him.
19. He took her to the office, got her a new hat and told her she would be working with Nina.
19. He took her to the office, got her a new hat,* and told her she would be working with Nina.
20. As she touched the slimy chicken breasts, she started getting in her groove, her heart slowed down and started beating normally again.
20. As she touched the slimy chicken breasts, she started getting in her groove;* her heart slowed down and started beating normally again
21. “Please give the flowers too the girl to.” I asked.
21. “Please give the flowers to* the girl,* too*.” I asked.
22. Even though they have been quite successful in there own way throughout the journey of life Bob has a various number of jobs ranging from the lowest point being a vacuum cleaner salesman to being a supervisor for Dupont Corporation.
22. Even though he has* been quite successful in his* own way, throughout the journey of life, Bob has a* number of jobs, ranging from the lowest point -* being a vacuum cleaner salesman *- to being a supervisor for Dupont Corporation.
23. His mother asked “Then why are all of your friends with you if you were just gargling Listerine”? “You’re Lying”! She said.
23. His mother asked “Then why are all of your friends with you if you were just gargling Listerine?”* “You’re Lying”! *she said.
24. The day was long and tedious and the work was physical.
24. The day was long and tedious,* and the work was physical.
25. Why is it so important that we learn the basic moves other writers, why can’t we just use our own thoughts?
Don't understand this.
26. Joe reads all kinds of mysteries, and nonfiction.
26. Joe reads all kinds of mysteries, and non-*fiction.
27. His parents are happily married after thirty years.
27. His parents are happily married,* after thirty years.
28. Joe reaches into the car and turns the radio on to 98.5 so he could listen to some jazz while he washed the car.
28. Joe reaches into the car,* and turns the radio on to 98.5,* so he could listen to some jazz,* while he washed the car.
29. Being that he’s the old
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